Motel Operation - Pic Fic - Oct 6th (although it was due on the 3rd)

[jantojones.livejournal.com]

I'm late again and, because I couldn't think of anything better, this tale has a terrible title.

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Comments

[threecee.livejournal.com]

Excellent Illya POV and vivid description. Liked Waverly checking off the handover as completed because he hadn't heard otherwise.

The last sentence seemed a bit abrupt to me. Maybe because I was expecting Napoleon's POV on taking the handover and returning to HQ to be fleshed out a bit.

[jantojones.livejournal.com]

Thank you :-)
I'm glad you enjoyed the story as much as you did.

(As for the ending, I'm really not that good a writer and I was having difficulty coming up with a decent end. So, I decided to just round it off. I'll maybe add it to my ever-expanding file of 'to be extended' stories)

[threecee.livejournal.com]

You are a good writer; I've read your other work.

The last line was just a bit, "And they lived happily ever after" after such a strong start. Of course, I've been writing what seems to be the never-ending story for quite a long time, so I should learn to just stop.