Defection - Once Upon a Time Affair - Feb 1st

[jantojones.livejournal.com]

Grateful thanks go to duckys_lady for acting as beta on this piece. It got away from me and went over 4000 words. I lose all belief in myself if a story goes to long for me. (4k words is not long to many, but for me it's epic.)

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Comments

[ssclassof56.livejournal.com]

I’m glad this one got away from you. :) I enjoyed it a lot. You kept up the momentum throughout. The details and characterizations painted a vivid mental picture. I especially liked your descriptions of Harrigan. The study was a testament to the good taste he didn’t possess but which his vast, stolen wealth was able to buy.

[jantojones.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much :-)
I'm glad it worked. The momentum was one of the things I was worried about.

[gevr.livejournal.com]

A very good story. I enjoyed it very much !

[jantojones.livejournal.com]

Thank you :-)
I'm so pleased it worked.

[mrua7.livejournal.com]

You need to venture into the 4000 word count more often cuz! Well thought out and well written... excellent descriptions and dialogue! Brava!

PS I'm still working on the Once Upon a time story from August, lol!

[jantojones.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much, Cuz!!
The 4000 words had nothing to with me. The story dictated where it wanted to go, LOL.

To paraphrasre my mother, you'll finish when you finish. These things come at heir own pace :-)

[mrua7.livejournal.com]

Let me rephrase... 'Don't fight the feeling!" When you're on a roll like that, let it keep going. You've definitely created a feeling in this story that something short couldn't have done justice.

[jantojones.livejournal.com]

That's why it got away from me. There were certain plot points which had to be put in, and I had to allow the story time to get to those points, so it definitely wouldn't have worked as a shorter piece. I'm just glad it worked out how I wanted it, and that it flowed well.

Did I have you fooled at the beginning, or did you realise early what was happening?

[mrua7.livejournal.com]

Yeah I figured out what was happening. I have a WIP with Napoleon turning traitor so there's a similar thought process, but different enough from what you did in your story. Eventually (like so many others) I'll finish it. lol!
Writing has just gotten away from me!

[duckys-lady.livejournal.com]

This is really a wonderful read! Thanks for the privilege of reading it early. :-)

[jantojones.livejournal.com]

Thank you for checking it over, and putting my mind at rest :-D